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Hey, is a poem alright for a critque?

If you can at all here's the link


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Many thanks.

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Hello. I am having a little trouble with one of my stories. You can find it in the Other Fiction forum under Encantado First Person Parts 1 and 2. I will warn you it is long, both parts put together are around 5,000 words. Any help you could give me as far as editing is concerned would be appreciated. Thanks. :)
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Hey Alainna!

I just started this, and it's really raw, and probably sucks horribly. So could you be a dear and be really harsh, leaving my story in five thousand little pieces and my protaganist begging for her life?

Thanks! Its the first part of hopefully others (I'm like a man - I have commitment issues when it comes to stories), so thanks a million!

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I'm accepting critiques again - so keep them coming in! :D
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Hey! I've been working on my Séance series! The first one got a lot of reviews, but the last two need some more help. Thank you!

The Séance

The Ouija Board

The Possession

Thank you so much!

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Done :D

Any more?

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I feel kind of bad asking this, but...

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Only it needs help, even though it's got a fair number of reviews already and it is several chapters in and it is long, and it isn't finished yet.

If you'll just review the first chapter, and the others only if you really want to? I'd be really grateful. :D You have to scroll down the page to get to the part called "Drych-ddelwedd" with the Gandhi quote. Ignore the stuff that comes before that, the Drych-ddelwedd is where it begins properly.

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Hey, this is a story I started a while back and I wanted to know if I should drop it or continue. Please review. Just an all around review of you have time; character, plot, dialog, etc.

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*pounce* Critiques, please?

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All done.

[s]I'm afraid I'm not excepting any requests until the end of August now, as I'll be on holiday.[/s]

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Will you please review this?

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Thanks!

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When you get time, I'd really like a review on this please! :) :D

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Hi Alainna,
I was hoping you would have a chance to review the story I wrote for Rosie Unicorn's contest.

Title: Wyndolyn
Rating: PG
Genre:Fantasy Fiction
Link: topic50754.html

I hope it's not too boring to read:)
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Looking for peeps to review my novel:)

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