Critiques like blades, cutting up (yeah, yeah) your story!

Hey! I know you've already done a lot of these, and you're probably already tired, but... If you could please have a look at my three-part Romantic Fiction story? You don't have to read the three of them if you don't want to.

Pleaaase want to?

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Hey! This is a entry for a contest JFW1414 is holding. I was hoping that you would be able to rip it into shreds? I hate the ending - it involves vamptires, and it's incredibly cliche concerning this day in age. But, you know, dismiss that. I didn't know how else to end it.

Anyway, critique for me? They are just so great, and you know, how rare are those?

Link! -

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Well, you don't say anything about not doing scripts, so...

Please don't kill yourself with punctuation and grammar. I'd love character impressions, dialogue complaints, and plot holes!

Invasion of the Penis Snatchers

Take your time.

'cause you love me more than life itself?

'cause you're getting an insanely detailed critique from me for entering my contest? (Seriously - I've already critiqued it. I'm just waiting to post it 'til I finish the others.)

'cause you're the best esme that exists?

Out of Focus

~JFW1415

^_^ Notice, m'dears, that the critiques that you are getting - will get, eh - are rather delayed. That is due to a major (unfortunate) lack of time on my part, but I'll get to them very, very soon, so no worries on that. I'm afraid that for now I'll stop accepting requests, though (F.Mrs.B. being last accepted, for now), so that everyone can get theirs (critique) in a reasonable amount of time. Next week max.

Anyway, sorry, sorry, but you'll get them soon. Thanks!

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