Hey dude
This is pretty cool. I like the lithe twitch you feel from this boy, the way he's never setting and wanting to go, move, fly far away. Dreams are a fickle thing and differ vastly, but we all have at least one large dream that people tell us to give up on.
Like the draco constellation that is circumpolar, our dreams our always changing, fleeting, morphing. But there's always the one big dream we never forget and always hang onto until our nails break off. And if by the gods we do achieve that dream and finally get what we want, well, that would be day.
The rhyme scheme in poems is vastly overused and quite a bore but in your poem it's actually refreshing and pleasant. Really good stuff, yo. Keep on keepin' on.
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