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Rare to find

by youngwolf1105


My soul crys out, to be with you.
Take one look at me,
And tell me what do you see.
Do you know that I love you,
Tell me can't you tell.
My heart and reach out,
But I won't shout.
Words can't describe,
What only time will find.

Nobody knows, just you and me.
Nobody cares, not that they should.
Who knows, but you and me.
We don't need the approval, of friends and family.

Chorus
I believe, that you and me,
Can make it through this.
Cause all along, I have known,
Who you are, but I don't care.
Cause you are rare, so very rare.....
To find.


Only time will time,
The race we've run.
My god, we've made it through it.
But it's not done.
Life maybe short,
But eternity is long.
I wanna spend it with you,
When life is through.

Chorus



We make the choice,
To begin and to end.
You are my rock,
So steady to stand.
I'm just your ballon,
Happy and free.
And I've attached you,
To the end of my string.

Chorus


No one can tell us how,
To feel.
Love is beautiful,
And pure.
It's a steep climb,
Take one step at a time.
I can't lose you,
Cause you're to rare, to find.







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Fri Mar 02, 2012 8:31 am
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hudz96 wrote a review...



Heya :)

My Soul Cries.... i think its supposed to be Cries... and not crys

And tell me What you see... I think you should make the third line like this instead of saying And tell me what do you see.

Tell me, Cant you tell? Your grammar... :P i would check all... but im not very good at that area muj so i shall leave that out okay?

At your chorus... second Para... Only time will ... tell I think its supposed to be?
I think that line Life maybe short... should actually be Life may be Short...

And last sentence of the last Para.... Cause you're too rare to find... not to.

now i got that outta the way... I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!! its so sweet!!!
My fav Para is the second to last one.... *grins* aweSHUM!!!

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hudz
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hudz96 says...


GAH i just realized that its hard to make sense of what iv written at all!!! just ignore iht!



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Mon Feb 27, 2012 4:29 pm
Dr. Who says...



I <3 this song. And I <3 you






I <3 you too ;)




The secret of being tiresome is to tell everything.
— Voltaire