Hey there! Here's my review:
First of all, your poem is great! I love the sensory details and imagery used to describe the storm outside, which is the first positive I'm going to mention.
Your use of personification in describing the storm outside as a battlefield adds lots of depth and intensity to the imagery. The language used to describe the storm is also captivating, with words like "thrilling," "exciting," and "amazing" emphasizing the speaker's fascination with the natural elements. Good, good.
Another positive aspect is the way your poem explores the internal struggles and battles that people face. The metaphor of the storm as a battle within the speaker's mind is a powerful one, conveying the emotional turmoil and chaos that can be experienced in times of stress and conflict.
It's great how your poem also touches on themes of loneliness and isolation, which I'm sure many people can relate to.
It was difficult for me to find anything that you can try and improve but the ending sort of feels a bit abrupt and could use some more resolution. Perhaps adding a few lines to tie everything together and provide closure would help enhance the overall impact of the poem.
Also, the repetition of "fighting, fighting, fighting" in the third stanza, for example, can become monotonous.
Anyways, this is a really captivating and powerful poem you made.
Good job!
- HB
Points: 49
Reviews: 17
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