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Hey there, xxFleetingEternity!
I'm Euph, and in the spirit of Review Day, I am here to review your poem!
Let me start off by saying that I love the flow to this poem, as well as to all of your other pieces of work. You truly are a great a poet and I am happy to call you part of the Young Writers’ Society Family. <3
My only suggestion for you is that you might want to include more colorful vocabulary to lure your readers in further. This will allow us to get a better visual. This is something I have mentioned in all of your other works that I have reviewed. This is a key in writing.
A small critique I must make is that in the last line of the second stanza, you might want to adjust it to say:
“Darkness seeks me out The torment of years in flame Destroyed: Both body and mind.”
This will allow the flow of the poem to be adjusted slightly.
Another small critique I would like you to fix is in the last stanza, you say:
“A life is only What you create it to be We surrender life.”
I would like for you to combined the second and third line into one complete thought. Also, in the last sentence, you might want to say “We surrender to life”.
Overall, I really like your poem and would love to read more of your work!
I hope that this review could help you in some way.
If you ever need me, feel free to drop by either on my wall or inbox me something, and I’d be glad to help you out with anything, or simply just to talk about the revisions I have made.
Yours always,
Euphoria
These are all really good, but the second to last one is my favorite. It creates a very vivid picture.