OK I have a story plot, well partly, and I just need to know if it's worth writing. And if it is a few things (that you can either help me with or I'll go look it up) Well anyways here's the idea, and part of the plot I have:
Ana is a 13 year old girl who supposedly lost her memory from birth to 7, because of a car crash (the second she was in). Her twin brother and older brother were separated from her. (Now done with the past, here's the future... well kinda:) A part of the government is looking for her and her brothers. (unknown: something I need to look up) One night she's kidnapped, and brought to a prison-like place. She meets many other kids like her. and they some how try to over throw that part of the government.
Yeah it's very complicated right now, but after I figure out the reason she's kidnapped it won't be so complicated (suggestions are welcomed!!:D) So.... what ya think? should I write it? or should it turn into dust? well I'll let you think about it. If ya want. Just get back to me soon!
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
OKayyy, well this is an interesting one. I haven't really scene something that's meant to be a plot summary in some time here. Usually its would be prologues that are more like plot summaries. And this one, well, I have to start out by saying, this doesn't really seem to have much detail to it. It seems to have only made it just about barely past the idea stage.
Moving beyond that little issue, I will say what we do happen to have here does seem quite intriguing. There's a pretty good chunk of an idea and even if it seems like it'll take quite a bit of worldbuilding before this is fully usable and quite some backstory will also have to be involved there is certainly a lot of potential for this to be a pretty intriguing read here.
I think this sort of two parts situation you have here is also quite interesting. The first part seems like it could just as easily sort of be its own story followed by a sort of sequel or you could simply develop all of that into a backstory. It all comes together rather nicely I think as a potential story.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Oooooh it sounds pretty good! You'll have to tell me when you post it! Because I'll need to read it!
Sounds good!
Do you mean it's gonna be like 'teen saves world' type of thingy?
Cuz if so, those stories are always popular!
It's spelled with one 'n' cause it's not Anna it's Ana (pronoused Ah-na).
I think I have the reason the government is looking for her and her brothers down... but it's to good to put here... sorry but when I get a REALLY good Idea no one knows about it until it's writen down in a book.
Well, I think all stories are worth writing, but I'm a little confused. Why would the government be looking for her and her brothers just cuz she lost all her memory from age 7?
Not necessarily. An author can spell a name any way he or she wants to. And I've seen the name spelled with just one n before. *shrugs*
yup yup, u should continue it for sure!!! i agree with riechieru (did i spell that right?) that any story is worth continuing, plus the plot sounds way kewl!! but how come you spelled "Ana" with only n? i find that most peculiar. isnt it sposed to be "Anna?"
LoL Thanks. I already have part of the first chapter writien down. I'm going to be transfuring it soon to my laptop (once I get it
) so it's in my notebook at the time being. Yeah I don't really like the superbabies comment. I like BabyGenises#1 better. The Superbabies movie was insalting to the first one. Well anyways, thanks for the reviews!
I think it's a pretty cool story.
Overthrowing the government is just crippling it and taking away its power. The children would need to expose the evil plan the government has, and create a new organization to take the previous government place.
I say try it, its one step up from superbabies.
I bet you, next year you'll wish you made her 14. And then the year after that you'll wish you made her 15
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At any rate, go for it. If it's good, then it's good. If it ends up bad, either try it again, or write a different story.
Really - if you have an idea you may at least try it
I think you should go for it. It could turn out to be a really good story and maybe you'll get it published, but you'll never know if you don't at least give it a wirl.
Lol! Okay, we don't want to know any spoilers anyway.
But, if your plan is making her involved with a government of mythical creatures, then I advised you to stop. *I* did that, lol!
LOL!!!!!!!!
It dosen't mean that there going to 'throw' the government. It means... Ummm... I don't know what it means but it's not throwing the government... I think it means something like take over... (just be glad that it's only one part of the government!! and not the whole thing)
No that's not what they need her for... but I'm not going to post the intire reason why they need her... let's just say... she's not from this world (AND NO SHE'S NOT AN ALIEN)... Hee hee hee
~Stevie
What Snoink said... I mean, honestly, why would they want her? What do they need a 13 year olf girl for, secret child labor for making nikes? (I knew those were bad shoes...)
....how are they going to throw off the government?
It sounds like "Teenz that are Crazy!!" XD
Personally I think any story is worth writing. If you have an idea don't wory if it's good or bad. Just write it. But first I think you need to figure out why the government is after this girl.