Published February 26, 2010
First of all, I'm not sure if this is the right place to post this. Please tell me if i isn't. This poem is quite short. I hope that's okay.
Scared Writer
I write because I am in fright.
In fright that my thoughts may never be heard.
In fright that I may never express my views and opinions
Into the world.
I may not be the best but I will do better.
These are all the words of a scared little writer.
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Everyone scare in his/her first start. i too scared but someone made me realize that mine ideas are better then all just you wanted a words. i want to say same to you. your can change someone's life write all writings in good way.
if i wrote this it would be look like this...
I write because,
I am in fright.
In fright thoughts that
may never be heard.
In fright that I never,
express my views and opinions,
Into the world.
I may not be the best
but I will do better.
These are all words
which scared little writer.
Sorry for writing this again but it can make long effect.
carry on.
Suraj
Hi! This is short and sweet, but I think it could flow a lot better. The third line sounds a little too long and interrupts the flow a bit, so maybe split it into two or find a shorter way of saying what you want to say. I think this poem would also benefit from a bit more description. I like that it's short, so maybe just a little more to make it more unique to you. A good start.
Not everyone has to start out an expert.
I was expecting this to rhyme, but you pleasantly surprised me.
Not much to critique here; I'll send you a gift instead.