Published November 12, 2008
She said "I'm gonna get out of here some day"
And he said "Yeah you'll find a way to leave me behind"
Was it worth it, she wondered
To get away
Or love him back
And it started to rain
Hard
And a raindrop rolled down her cheek
And he wiped it away
As if it were a tear
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Hi there!
I got to say this was just okay...
It's a bit poor in depth. The times you said "She said" and " And he said", this is not a very good start, and it's not very good to use it like that in poetry. try to mixed it up a little.
You use to many and's! You have a good storyline, but you should reconsider the way you describe the action itself. maybe replace the and's with something else, or maybe even erase them.
Anyway, hope I helped! Ah, and don't take this personally, since I'm just trying to help! Sorry if I sounded mean
Keep writing!
Awwww! This is very cute! I like it, but it is a little to lovey dovey for me. This would be like a very silly teenage romance poem!
I still liked it htough! 
keep writing