Wow, you've managed to draw me out of my reviewing cave, which is, admittedly, impressive! It's only happened 25 times in my two year stay here, so good job on you! I make sure I only leave reviews on things I'm genuinely interested in and feel I have feedback on because I don't want to take a work out of the green room with a review that isn't very interesting or informative. So I've been watching this for a while now and it just slipped my mind, butttttt this came to the literary spotlight once again and I decided to finally dive in deep to this poem because why not? Bear with me as my thoughts splatter across the computer screen in an illogical and random order. So into the actual review: I'll dive into the actual lines in a minute, but the first thing I'll note on is the format, which I LOVE. I have no idea what program you used to create this, but it's brilliant. There are so many small and hidden details that you've thrown in there that I absolutely love. The first that I'll point out is at the very top in the tab, it shows you as searching the synonyms for ME of which there are zero results. This really shows the uniqueness of the poem and the author because there really isn't a synonym for a person. Nobody is going to be similar enough to correct or replace someone, and I love the message behind it. Secondly, the title is great. I've looked at this work and its title numerous times, and only just now realized the only letter you don't include is 'o'. There's no significance behind that, but I just thought you left out random letters, when in actuality you left out one specifically, which means you likely spent time picking out those words in the title specifically so you could leave one single letter out and it look broken, just like the keyboard (which is a lovely metaphor for life and people in general, by the way.) In the search bar, we see that you've typed in "lve letter frm a brken keybard", but in the actual bulk of text, the thing you're searching for synonyms for is "love letter to a perfect website." I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but I love the idea of someone using thesaurus.com because of their broken keyboard, and they're searching in vain for words that don't include the letter they can't use. This entire poem within itself is brilliant (as I've said many times already XD) but I especially like that detail. Now the next part of the format I'll note on is the different versions of the sentence you could be searching for. The first is listed as a noun and states
her attempt to decipher this
meaningless jargon on a computer screen
dear thesaurus.com, my love, i didn't mean toneglect you this week, i just thought i couldmake my own synonyms for a change,but i was cockynceited (adj. self-assured) to thinki could fit words to definitions that i can't put my tongue on.
i swallow too many emotions that i don't know the namesfor and you can always tell me the name epithet (noun. title given to something, someone)of my indigestion, while i just lick my lips to savour the sour resentment.
i guess i'm so used to being unreliable treacherous (adj. not trustworthy, not true)to myself that i wanted to break your loyaltybefore you had the chance to.
because my pencil lead snaps when i try to write and the bits of graphitelodge under the t button of my keyboard: my brokenessinfusing into the first letter of you.
but i should've known thatyou'll always have a better vocabulary than me, that you canalways tell me i'm not lost (adj. missing, off-track) with you, just lingering in the torn-up space between the filled linesof one notebook and the desolate sheets of the next.
you lift my chin and tell me i am not broken, just mutilated, and leave mewith a slap pat (noun. hard hit, often with hand) on the cheek.
whatcha! I saw the word angst in relation to a poem, and knew I needed to come JK this poem is amazing and I don't know how I'm going to critique it, but it's been relegated to the Green Room long enough, so I'm here to rescue it. Let's dive in... Visually, I really like how you include the replaced word with the definitions in a different color. It, obviously, makes it prominent and I think it helps with the overall imagery of this poem to make those "corrections" stand out more. Speaking of, I also love the word choices and replacements you chose. You did a really good job of making the feel of each word and its correction contrast really well with wildly different vibes even though they're technically synonyms. I assume that's what you were going for and it was executed beautifully -- really well done! Also, props to you on the overall structure of this poem. As someone who has done a visually-similar sort of poem in the past, I know how much time it takes to format something like this, and you did it very well. I just love everything about this poem and I'm starting to realize that that is all you're going to get in this review -- shameless praise about how delightful this poem is. Overall, just a lovely poem. It was borderline too-poetic for my simpol brain to fully grasp, but it was just tangible enough that even I was able to follow along. +10/10 excellent poem, great job! ~Shady
Hi!This literally just made me day. I always need my thesaurus whenever I am writing so it was very relatable to me. I love the humor.Well done!
I came here thinking to leave a review but nope, this is too good I have nothing to say except I love this
always love your work and this is no exception <33
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Wow. Just…wow. That was so great! I loved it! I don’t know how you do it, but your poems are just so unique!
BRO I'VE HAD THE SAME THING HAPPEN TO MY KEYBOARD TOO BUT WITH THE LETTER B LOLyeah after keysmashing the b button too many times i've rage quit and bought a plastic keyboard cover so that's how my poem would've ended
Hey there! Mordax here for a review!Okay so..... I really loved this poem. A lot. Like... a lot. I love how you formatted it and would have been drawn to keep reading for that reason alone were your poem not also amazing and captivating. To be honest, the title was what originally drew me in with how clever it is.Now seeing as this is a review, I should probably review your work and provide something useful. However, there really isn't anything I can critique. I love how you crossed off original, important words and replaced them with synonyms. It not only shows this thought process of the narrator struggling to put words to their feelings, it also even changes the meaning of the poem as these synonyms, while similar to the original word, still have their own meanings and connotations that change the tone of the poem. For example, treacherous is so much more harsh than unreliable and by using that replacement, you not only show the magnitude of this internal struggle, you also show a bit of self-hatred as the narrator chooses harsher words to describe themselves. My favorite line was:
just lingering in the torn-up space between the filled linesof one notebook and the desolate sheets of the next.
i lve ths s mch. suenly y keybard brk to. goo jb! < < <
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