Published December 29, 2005
I have seven classes
dramatic friends
and too many prior commitments to count
I am a 16 year old who acts like I don't give a shit
but I don't want my real self to be found out
I'm a opinionated pleaser,
but when I try, i get too frustrated to care if you're pleased
I think I'm passive, but I'm told I'm a touch violent
When pain comes I get truely scared
but I'll stand straight up and take it
I usually have hard days
but I don't need a "man" to lean on
But despite all of my troubles
I know that I can leave all the weight that weighs a ton
and go home
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Diary entry poetry is a delicate genre. It must be done with care, and best usually done with detchment. This poem does not seem like it was revised. You wrote it then immeadiately posted it. The poem is not bad, but very raw. Revise, revise, revise.
okay,so it's not WOW material, but I like. However I am the one who wrote it.hum