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First of all, WOAH! Paragraphs smashed together! I recommend you to space them out so that you don't scare people away with this chunk of a monster. It's not that much, but when you don't space it out, it looks a lot. And if you want to make people read your story, you must make it easy for them to read it!

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"Windy day it is and my clean blond hair, cleanly combed away from my forehead and pale skin[,] makes all these girls stare as usual, the wind is doing its job." - Did I read this right? Is he saying the wind is doing his job by making all the girls stare at him? Hah!

"Though their sighing and giggling just at the sight of me[,] I don’t feel anything for them[--]at all[--]I’m just doing this to pass the time away." - I have a problem with this sentence. There's no comma in between.

"Yep, you guessed it, I have power, others do not even know exist, but I assure the readers, my looks are all natural." - This is one of the most cliche way of saying that he has powers... by saying he has powers. And did he just break the fourth wall? And at this part, "I have powers, others do not even know exist" - I feel like there's something missing somewhere in there because I have no idea what he's talking about. Others do no even know exist? Did you forget a [that] or so?

Pfft... he's wearing a light violet silk scarf....

He PURRED?! He's a cat!

"It was breathtaking." - Breathtaking is one word.

"She stood up and was swallowed by the huge guys cheering their throats [off] but before I lost sight of her she looked my way with smile smudged with the knowledge of victory." - The guys were cheering their throats off... ew.

"Food; sorry that was wrong, junk was on their table; fries,..." - this is a really weird place to place a semicolon... just saying.

"I went in and decided to buy whatever she will buy; I’m not a fan coffee, never was anyway." - HE'S NOT A FAN COFFEE?!

Then, holy crap came the conversation. Whenever somebody talks and finish, you need to enter in another paragraph. Because, "'How much?' she asked, her voice dancing in my ears. 'Half the price set on the screen if you give me your number' he replied and I wanted whole-heartedly to smack the grin off his face." - seems a tad too smudged in. And there should be a comma after [he replied]

"But how strange would it be if I did right." - He did right? What? Huh?!

"She placed the money on the counter and as she left the guy called her to say something I assume was a pick up line but her attention was with…me." - You need to add in commas and maybe rephrase this sentence. "She left the guy call her" - that sounds funny.

"'Demedichi' she said 'that’s my name, Demedichi Eversea but most people call me dem or demi' I took her hand in mine and introduce myself. She smiled and I felt something that I never felt in my life." - Why is her nickname lowercase? It's still a nickname, might as well capitalize it. Wait, he took her hand in his?

I'm going to stop here at this moment...

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The story overall was... completely confusing because of your wordings. Let me try to rephrase this... a popular blond dude was at the mall and then he sees a girl who just happens to steal his heart. Then he stalked her (or follow, if you want to be nice) and finds out that she was actually trying to hit on him. Then stuff happened. Yeah... this is so much what the hell?

And why must you lowercase Dem and Demi? It's her nickname, and it's best to capitalize it so that people know that it's somebody's name or something important.

Man, this is one heck of a love story. It happened waay too fast. One thing about romance is that you should never focus on romance so quickly. Let them build up, let them have a relationship as friends first before hitting them off. Wait, what the hell am I talking about? The ending scene was just them running away. I don't even know if they went off with each other or not. Ignore what I just said.

Anyways... you need to fix your mistakes!