[pt.1]
She awaked in a panic state, as if trapped inside herself.
She tried to escape but the doors were locked.
She searched for air to fill her lungs but there was none.
[pt.2]
Afternoon sunlight sneeked through the shutters.
Agitated at the though.
Her eyes were fighting the unwanted light.
[pt.3]
She dint want to fight no more.
Pulling down the covers she stepped onto the cold floor.
Dragged her legs towards the unlocked door.
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Just a few comments, as stated below.
Lots of things to fix. Maybe more that I didn't see. First of all, what is this? A poem? A story? What? It seems somewhere in between. And at first you say the 'locked' doors, and at the end you say the 'unlocked' doors. Which one is it?
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