There's a sarcastic bitter edge to the speaker's voice in this piece that I think gives it good character! You also have a good instinct on adding a bit of a twist to familiar dark imagery, and making it more unique. For instance the image of a "cracked mirror" - and describing it as "a web of cracks" -> nice! I can totally see that!
I think you might lean in a bit more to the sarcastic side, because I think that bitter edge is really your strength here. Make it angry, make it fierce!
You might also check out this helpful article by @Kaylaa from the Knowledge Base - Discovering Your Voice It's suggests different ways that you can capitalize on your unique poetic voice, and since I think that's one of your own strengths, you might find it a helpful read.
That being said, I also liked the elements of contrast you had inhere as well - the different colors that symbolic connections could be made to, the blood, and cold vs warm, scar vs ivory. All very interesting.
I can't quite tell what the main running story is, except that the speaker seems pretty angry about the "ivory woman" whoever they are and how they've hurt the speaker emotionally and maybe even physically, though they used to show kindness and love, they've since left and separated from the speaker.
It's a neat concept, but I'd love more hints about whether the ivory woman is just a person, or symbol for something else.
Well done here, and keep on writing!
~alliyah
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