Glistening sea, so full of life
looking onto the horizon of beauty
feeling the cool mist hit my face
inhaeling the salt water taste
seeing the depths of the water
and the change of color
looking into the coral reefs
staring into the eyes of the fish
swimming without a care
not ever once blinking
afarid to miss the beauty
of within
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Hey,
I'm returning the favour of a review and I'm gunna ad you as a friend because you can never have too many friends! Your poem is lovely and I think I get what you're trying to say. I think you're trying to say is that your scared on missing out of the beauty around you. Very well written, it felt natural and fluid. My favourite line was 'inhaeling the salt water taste' I thought that was very cleverly done, describing the sea spray as waste! Nice one
Any time you want help or by the look of this poem I might be asking you for help!
Peace
Brown Eyed Girl xxx