Hello Again, My Friend!
It's me, Raven, and I'd like to review your new story using my Familiar method! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...
What The Black Eyes See...
Albeit short, what a cute moment between a proxy and a human! With the dynamic of being a tool for the Puppeteer on a normal basis, yet doing normal things with a normal girl now, it's like this moment was plucked out of a broader romantic -but also somewhat tragic- poem. Perfect for a Valentine's Day treat! Let's get into the details though.
Where The Dagger Points...
I have no corrections or recommendations to make! I could imagine some cute dialogue from Zachary, about the sleeping Rosemary, but I will leave that to my imagination and not nitpick; this piece has all the essentials it needs to stand out and speak for itself as it is.
Why The Grin Widened...
My favorite moment from this piece is simple enough. That ending!
But in that moment, he could pretend that there was nothing wrong, that they were a predictable, boring couple from the predictable, boring movies.
This was just the perfect summary of the moment, like the cherry on top of it all. How even someone like Zachary can latch on to a tradition to have a night of normalcy, and even those "boring" moments can be some of the best -especially for these cursed souls. That's how I interpreted it, but so cute either way ~
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Overall, this was a wonderful little piece to go with the February holiday theme, and the Creepypasta theme made it all the more exciting to me. Nicely done!
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