Young Writers Society

Hey vampricone!

I think this is a really interesting way of displaying your work and I love that you've chosen to share it with us! If you do continue with your art, you could think about setting up a thread on the site where you can post it all. It's a cool way to keep track of your progress over time and means you can keep it all in once place.

In terms of the story, I think the idea that the boys playing reminds her of her friend is really sweeet and the link to then wanting to do something for that friend is also very wholesome. We don't really get an idea of how old the character is but from both mannerisms and the style you've chosen to draw the images (crayon especially) we can glean that she's probably pretty young so the fact they would think growing a garden would help get their friend back makes sense.

I was surprised when the friend did come back because of the garden though. That seems like a missing part of the plot to me, and one you could expand on. Does the friend hear of the garden and come back to see it, or did they simply move away and then come back? Or is the friend returning a figment of the character's imagination?

Either way, this was a fun change of pace from your usual writing and nice to read!

Icy

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

On a mission to rescue things from the green room I've run into something of a unique piece here. This definitely is a bit of a change of pace from what we normally see not just in the more obvious thing which is the format that this is presented in but also the general vibe of the story here which appears to be a lot more wholesome than a lot of other pieces that I've seen you produce.

I'll mainly focus on the story here because I am definitely not a person who should really be judging art and so going towards that, there's a surprisingly sort of complex vibe you can draw from this. On the surface it is very simple and given this is a picture book that seems to be the intention. We have someone who is looking for a friend they're missing very badly and despite one mishap they manage to regain the connection to said friend.

But I think there's something almost a little more in how these boys throwing something ends up reminding this person and how the idea of these flowers being planted is what brings the friend back. It almost seems to hint at this other person being some sort protective figure that was perhaps lost somehow and this seems almost like offering flowers to a gravestone of some sort to try and be closer to a person that passed away. Maybe I'm reading a little too much into this but that's something I thought of here.

Either way, overall I really enjoyed this. Its incredibly simple, but its a lovely little piece that does very much put a little smile on your face and from something this short and simple, what more can you really ask?

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

First of all, this is a nice story. It is very unique of how you can draw and then write in words. About the story, I love the bond and friendship of the main character and Katie and how this character thought of planning so Katie, a friend will come back. Continue drawing and writing!