Salutations, curious mind!
Rinisha is back here and ready to review 📚!
Buckle up, 'cause this is going to be a bumpy ride. I’m going to keep it short alright!✨
All in all
This party rocked, let's take a quick look!
I didn’t know you did poetry. Gosh, this was a nice one! I love your title, lovely choice. It gives away eerie vibes, but it also makes readers curious. The fact that you wrote an origin story of your username is a fun concept, great thinking. I would love to read more poetry by you, if that’s your wish.
You could work on:✒️
To be honest, I was kind of sad that your poem was this short. I would suggest you maybe expand it with using more hints instead of saying how things really are. And then at the end you reveal what actually is happening.
Anne stared at the circus tent.
It’s cloth was torn. It’s white stripes were yellow.
A world, where her secrets lay
Both eerie and dark ones
It was her wonderland
Where her dreams came true.
After being banished
For being different
Anna’s heart tore to shreds
As she slowly walked out.
Now,This was her home.
Her home for now, at least.
Have a nice day or night further! Keep writing! You are amazing!
Amazingly yours,
Rinisha – Be yourself and keep writing! 📖🎉
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