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Alone and shunned… (After Samuel became a demon)

by vampricone6783

*This song is from my “Town of Richardson” stories. The character singing this is a boy named Samuel after he died and was cursed to become a demon. Gacha Club character designs are on my wall. Enjoy!*

I…I’m all alone…

Alone and shunned

I’m a demon

But I won’t hurt anyone

Melinda, dear sister, the only one who isn’t afraid of me

The only one who holds onto me

I never knew that going to the circus was going to be the least of my worries

I never knew that I’d be turned into something else

I miss my family

I miss my life

I miss my friends

I miss everything

Please, I want my life back

Mr.Ladouceur, why did you take it from me?

I want to smile once again

I want to be human

I want to be loved

I want it all back

Please, if anyone is listening, help me

I feel so

A L O N E  AN D  S H U N N E D

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Sun Apr 23, 2023 12:41 am
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GengarIsBestBoy wrote a review...

Howdy hey! Gengar here to leave a review!

I haven’t read “Town of Richardson” yet, but I really enjoyed this poem!

I love how you portrayed Samuel’s emotions. He’s lost everything he held dearly by being turned into a demon. The readers can feel his desperation and desire to be human again.

My only suggestion is to expand on Melinda more. I want to know more about her (okay, this is partially my fault for not reading the story yet, but I’m planning to read it soon!)


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Sat Apr 22, 2023 11:15 pm
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AkiraBaker wrote a review...

this is really great, you know! its short and doesnt really rhyme, and ive never been a big fan of poems that dont rhyme, but other than that its good! it explains the emotions well and i could relate to the emotions. ever since i had some personal stuff done to me, ive been feeling the same way this demon Samuel has felt. alone and shunned. i can relate and thats what i like the most. you might have a knack for poetry, who knows?
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