At peace I am
Through the currents of the depth
Waves crash as in a cycle
Time does not move here
I am not waving for help
For I am waving goodbye.
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This poem captures the heavy, exhausting reality of emotional despair. I feel your pain. It must have been hard to express yourself, but I am happy you were strong enough to write this and post it. I am rooting for you. Darlet said she would scream for me so I would like share that with you if you wanted. I love your writing and I am happy you got to let that out. We are here for you.
You are an amazing writer, and I am always online *most of the time* so if you ever need to chat with someone PM or we could chat on my wall. keep working hard and stay strong.
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It was great I like how you kept it short while saying everything. It's kind of cool how you can express so much in just 6 lines I am impressed it takes me like 15-20 lines so express everything in one poem.
The part where you said (I am not waving for help/ For I am waving goodbye) hit hard. This is the saddest part. It is a play on the phase "waving or drowning." Meaning (when someone is drowning, they wave their hand for help) but you on the other hand are saying (you don't need to be saved and farewell).
One last thing:
You are strong I 2 believe you don't need help, but I want you 2 know that no matter what I will always be here to help even if you don't need my help. I can tell deep down you're exhausted. Remember to PM me because I am always prepared.
TBH longest review I ever wrote because it was from my heart fr.
thank you SO MUCH! this reply genuinely means a lot to me. ill definitely reach out if i do come to that point in time
I love how each word you put in runs in deep, making us think, even rethink past choices or past mistakes. This short poem has such deep words and emotion behind it that it makes it perfect by choice of length!! It does not need to be long, neither does it need to be moderate, the raw emotion pours out of your words like a dam that falls down. It leaks and lets us drown in the words to feel your emotion, keeping the audience close, and almost just begging for more!!
I adore how you knew EXACTLY when to skip a line to keep us on our toes to read more, and currently on me it is working, I would love to read more raw and emotional poems from you, letting your words sink in us like frostbite on flesh, its perfect!!
Keep writing and keep up the good work I really enjoyed reading this so PLEASE do keep me updated!!!
thank you sm for this! i really wanted the poem to be deep and relatable for others. and dww, i have a few poems im going to publish sooner or later! %uD83D%uDC95
hello. this is majuli.
i love short poetry, so here i am.
crushing. this is the word i would use to describe your poem. it reeks of resignation and submission. 'i am not waving for help'..............oof. so, so harsh, and so, so real. if this is based on your personal feelings, i hope you are doing alright.
i also see the links with su!c!dal tendencies, but it feels peaceful. the poem feels peaceful. the sentence 'at peace i am' clarifies that. its an interesting contrast to make, yet so common in the real world. beautiful.
another contrast which i think is a personal interpretation of mine: the title. honestly when i saw the title i expected a hopeful poem. something about how pretty waves are, or about how life comes and goes like waves. the dark theme of the poem shook this viewpoint of mine.
beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.
your work is loved.
thank you for sharing.
thank YOU for sharing! i would also definitely use the word %u2018crushing%u2019 for this poem. i made the title simple so maybee people would be more intrigued by it! the poems I write are slightly based of my feelings, but I promise you im doing alright. thank you again for asking though!
Short but crushing poetry I see. I believe this is about the final point of hopelessness in which a person finally accepts their doomed fate and carries it like a prophecy. Likewise, there is an uncanny serenity in it as also described in the lines,
"At peace I am
Through the currents of the depth"
However, what makes the poem stand out is the way you describe this feeling through the waves, perhaps of an ocean. Sure these two are vastly different things, however, one common thing that they share is the feeling of unsettling calmness between both, which is well described.
"Waves crash as in a cycle
Time does not move here"
Feelings are indeed timeless. However the paradoxical wrath of life is that despite this feeling of timelessness, there still lingers a repetition, a cycle as you say, which is also something that could be imagined to be present amidst the waves.
"I am not waving for help
For I am waving goodbye."
This part is outright devastating. I don't know what else to say except for the fact that this part of the poem ties to the theme of the poem itself.
Alright that's all, keep writing ^^
you understood the poem EXACTLY!! your analysis of each stanza means a lot to me, thank you sm!
Welcome!!
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Yay, short poetry!!
This is so quiet and devastating!! I love how short it is, because the restraint makes the emotion feel even heavier. There’s this eerie calm throughout the poem, like the speaker has already passed the point of panic and entered something stiller, deeper, kind of sacred in a way. It feels less like a cry for help and more like a final surrender, which makes the ending hit SO hard.
I really like the inversion of “At peace I am.” It gives the line this old, solemn, prayer-like quality. It feels detached from ordinary speech, which fits the underwater atmosphere so well. The speaker does not sound frantic; they sound strangely composed. “Currents of the depth” is also lovely because it makes the ocean fee more like a force carrying the speaker somewhere. The “depth” feels emotional as much as physical, like grief, acceptance, memory, or exhaustion.
!!!! LOVE this
The idea of waves crashing “as in a cycle” gives the poem this sense of inevitability. Waves keep coming no matter what, and that makes the speaker’s stillness feel even more intense ~ The world is moving around them, but they are not moving with it. “Time does not move here” is such a gorgeous line, too. It really captures that suspended feeling, like being underwater, or being in a moment so emotionally overwhelming that everything else stops. There’s something haunting about it because peace starts to feel like an absence.
What an ending!! This is such a sharp, painful reversal. The image of waving is so simple, but the meaning completely changes between the two lines. At first, we think of rescue, panic, survival. Then the speaker corrects us: no, this is farewell. That is devastating!! I also love how controlled the voice is here. There is no exclamation, no pleading, no dramatic collapse ~~ Just clarification. That makes it hurt more. The speaker is not misunderstood because they are unclear, they are misunderstood because everyone assumes waving means wanting to be saved.
^^^ I do wonder if you could make the ocean imagery just a little more specific before the ending. The final twist is very strong, but I’d love to feel even more of the speaker’s body in the water: the salt, the cold, the pull at their clothes, the silence under the surface, etc. Even one concrete detail could make the goodbye feel more physically present!!
Overall, this is a beautifully restrained poem!! It has such a calm-before-disappearance feeling, and the ending reframes everything in such a painful way. I really admire how much emotion you get out of so few lines. Amazing work!! ^_^
- Payton
thank you so much! im really glad you picked up on the sudden in meaning with the last stanza. you got it exactly how i wanted people to see it. another thank youuu for giving me that advice, i will definitely use it for future writing.