Published November 17, 2010
Hold your breath, count to three, now let it all out...
Broken glass on the streets
Smashed and shattered, glory’s feats
Glinting red in the moon light
Spilt blood from another’s fight
This dump is the shits
And you’re trapped in it
Is it really an event when nothing falls into nothingness?
And do you ever get that sinking feeling, in every single orifice
When someone does something, and you feel like you die inside
Don’t know where you’re going, just buckle up for the ride
Oh
Who am I supposed to blame?
The celebrities, with all their fame?
The government, with rules so lame?
Or is it god? Is he even there?
Is he listening? Does he even care?
I DON’T KNOW!!
So I’m lashing out at the world
And I can’t hear what I’m told
Don’t bother talking to me
I’m too far gone
They’re talking, they won’t shut up, but you don’t hear the words
The world drops out from your feet, no more bees and birds
Your heart’s in your throat now, like you're gonna vomit it up
And each word they say is like a punch in the gut
And it don’t make no sense, not even to you
And no one understands and if you tries to explain
Your head will explode, in unbelievable pain
and
Who am I supposed to blame?
The celebrities, with all their fame?
The government, with rules so lame?
Or is it god? Is he even there?
Is he listening? Does he even care?
I DON’T KNOW!!
So I’m lashing out at the world
And I can’t hear what I’m told
Don’t bother talking to me
I’m too far gone
And when u realize someone close to you doesn't know you at all
What can you do? Can you even take that fall?
And when you come to terms with the fact
That everyone thinks, you're someone you’re not
Coz there ain’t no real you, how is THAT s’pposed to feel?
How is THAT even right, dude? How is THAT even real?
Yeah and I wonder if I’ve gone completely insane
Got nothing to lose bro, but I’ve got nothing to gain
Who am I supposed to blame?
The celebrities, with all their fame?
The government, with rules so lame?
Or is it god? Is he even there?
Is he listening? Does he even care?
I DON’T KNOW!!
So I’m lashing out at the world
And I can’t hear what I’m told
Don’t bother talking to me
I’m too far gone
All is smashed, all destroyed
Nothing left, empty void
Every hope, every dream
All is smashed to smithereens
Who am I supposed to blame?
The celebrities, with all their fame?
The government, with rules so lame?
Or is it god? Is he even there?
Is he listening? Does he even care?
I DON’T KNOW!!
So I’m lashing out at the world
And I can’t hear what I’m told
Don’t bother talking to me
I’m far too far too far gone
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I really liked this poem! And your rhyming scheme! It was so good(:! But, these lines threw me off a little bit:
The government, with rules so lame?
Or is it god? Is he even there?
Is he listening? Does he even care?
I DON’T KNOW!!
"Does he EVEN care?" I think you should take the even out. And find something that rhymes with lame, like game or shame or something. "I DONT KNOW!!" I think you should take this out or save it until the end(: Anyways, Good job!