There were times that Mary really wanted to grow up faster that sometimes in the past led her to hate her parents for treating her like a kid. She would always look at the mirror and tell herself, “I want to grow up now. I want to move out and stay away from them. I want to have my own life and do what I want. But with them I can’t do any of the things I want.” She thought her years with them were like hell that she hated them so much. She hated them for the guarding and over-protection they’ve given her. And because of this she would always scream to them and curse their names in the air. “I want my freedom!” She even wished for them to just disappear or fade away. She didn’t realize the things they’ve sacrificed, the struggles and dilemmas they’ve faced because of her. The pain and the sleepless nights they had. Her parents never complained about it, not even a single word and a sign of regret. They loved and love her very much though she treated them like they don’t deserve a respect.
Years didn’t go too long and there she was! She grew up and went to College. Finally, she got what she always wanted… the nightlife and the freedom. Her parents were in hard times since she left while she was having good times doing the things she has always wanted. She didn’t notice that she was using most of her time for fun and forgot her studies until she failed in most of the courses she took up. Her smart friends ditched her and had no one to turn to and lean on. No shoulders to cry on. No friends to cheer her up. She was so empty and so depressed. Then, she came up with so many realizations. After learning her lessons, she wrote to her parents.
Dear Mom and Dad,
When I was a kid, I didn’t really think of you all the time. I only remember you when there were special occasions that you were needed to be remembered. When I had problems and had no one to run to except you. I only remember you when I wanted to beg money for school or for my own needs and sanity. When I was sick and needed you to help me. I didn’t really appreciate the things you do for me. I didn’t realize that you’re worth to be proud of. I didn’t realize how lucky I am to have you as my parents. I’m sorry. I was very dull that I didn’t know how amazing you are. I want you to know that you’re more than just parents. You’re my best friends and great cheerleaders that keep me up and cheer me up whenever I am down; you’re my doctors that cure me whenever I am sick; and my teachers that teach me good deeds and manners- which I didn’t really take seriously. You’re more than anyone else. Mom. Dad. I know I’ve caused you a lot of pain and I’m really sorry about that. You’re incredibly amazing parents. And I don’t know what my life could be without you. And I didn’t know if you knew so I’m taking this chance to say that I had the best days with you. I want you to know that I am so happy to have you both as my parents and I am very proud of you. Thank you for everything. I LOVE you and I MISS you.
Loving you sincerely,
Mary
By then, Mary never cursed her parents again. And on her graduation day, she made her parents really proud of her for being the SUMA CUM LAUDE of their University.
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Hello, Sky here. I'm going to be your reviewer for this piece.
My first point:
"There were times that Mary really wanted to grow up faster that sometimes in the past led her to hate her parents for treating her like a kid."
For some reason, I get out of breath when I try to read this sentence out loud, meaning that it's running way too long. Try rephrasing it or adding a comma somewhere.
Example:
"There were many times that Mary wanted to grow up. In the past, this desire led her to hate her parents for treating her like a child."
This is just an example. You don't have to use it.
Second point:
This is a very tiny point. I just thought these two words should have a comma in between instead of a period.
So instead of: "Mom. Dad."
Maybe: "Mom, Dad,"
Last point:
Another small comment, but the word 'Sincerely' should actually be capitalized.
So, other than the three comments I stated above, there is nothing else wrong that I see about your piece of work.
I found it quite touching how Mary realized her love for her parents in the end. I was about to start hating her for treating her parents like poop.
I hope you have a wonderful time and I wish to see more work from you. c:
Sky.