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Hurting. I am hurting. Why. That’s all I can think about. Why me? Why do I always get hurt? Why did he do that? Why is he like this? Why am I like this? Why am I constantly in pain for things, I didn’t do? Something I didn’t do. Something, I did not do.
As I sit on my bed, I think of him. I think of the reasons why I like him. Why I liked him. If you really want to be with someone, you will blind yourself from their mistakes, from their flaws, from everything that makes them bad, just so they are perfect to you. It’s not the being blind that’s bad, it’s deciding if what you can’t see is worth discovering.
As I sit on my bed, I think about why I didn’t listen to her. Why didn’t I listen to his ex? Or my friend? Or my gut? Why did I trust him over them? If you really want to be with someone, you won’t pay attention to the negativity others will provide. Yet, it isn’t negativity until you realize, it’s too late. The damage has been done.
Congratulations, you are a convict. You stole from me. You stole my trust, you stole my hope, you stole my faith, and my heart. If you had stolen something people can see, you would be shamed, maybe even put in jail. But because there is no proof, because the things you stole were internal, it does not matter. It only matters to me. Just me.
Liars are always liars. Cheaters are always cheaters. Assholes are always assholes. There is no changing that. Oh, how I wish we could change that. Oh how I wish for a lot of things. To go back in time, to know then what I know now, to fix all my mistakes. Time, time is healing. It’s just the amount of time it takes is what’s hard.
You lied to me. Again. You said you needed time but that was just an excuse. You said we had a chance but again, another lie. I was too good to you. I am too good for you. I deserve better, you deserve worse. You said we moved to fast yet you were the one rushing. You said it wasn’t the end, but I shouldn’t have been so naive and I should have realized that when we kissed, there would not be another time. I should have just left it at that and not have obsessed over the fact that you might actually want me.
Here I go again. Constantly picking up the pieces of my broken heart. As I lay on my bed, I think about how all I have is myself, and that’s okay. My friends have my back and I know that if I fall I will have them to catch me. I realize that I don’t need you, so please go back.
Even though I had feelings for you, I let them go. Realizing how much of an asshole you are was the most incredible feeling in the world. Setting myself free from your bullshit, that is what felt good. No one deserves to feel the pain I have felt in my lifetime. No matter how low, or shallow they are, including you. So please, grow up and realize the whole world doesn’t revolve around you. My world doesn’t revolve around you just because I was good to you. You took me for granted and it was a big mistake.
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Hi trashcan123!
I just want to say that i totally feel for you and all i know is that karma's a loser and he'll get his one day!
As for your piece, i absolutely loved how you would go from present tense to past tense like:
"I think of all the reasons why i like him. Why I liked him"
It's almost as if you are reassuring yourself, which shows up in your writing!!!!
If it's any consolation, i love your writing and i think whoever got you to feel this way is a total jerk.
Write on!!!!!!!
-SpencerReidIsMyLife-
Hi, yeah I agree with Moonwatcher. Please change the rating to 18+. I see you are also new to the site.So welcome bud! I see this is more of a rant than a poem.I used to do that a lot. And my old literary magazine advisor would tell me to write separate poems on each line. So this can be a basis and then you, dear Author, can make a whole series of poems on this. I am sorry for what happened to you. I have dealt with similar. And yes, it sucks. Wholeheartedly I hated what happened, but due to those people I have become strong and fierce, and a rebel in a way. It is weird I know. But please know, it is good to move on. And I am glad you are writing about it, rather than bottling it up. I hope to see more from you, have a good day
Hello there, Trashcan123!
This is Moonwatcher here with a review.
I'd suggest changing the rating of this poem to 18+, due to the very extreme language that is frequent throughout the poem. This just being to serve as a warning. This is the young writers society, after all.
Pulling up something about Prose Poetry right here;
I think imagery, or some sort of poetic device could be very beneficial to this poem. There isn't very much that stands out about it, and it looks like a regular piece of prose, rather than prose poetry. Although the center of this poem isn't so much of narrative, plot, and character, it doesn't include much of any other poetic elements. Not to mention that as a poem, this is somewhat bland, and doesn't present anything very new to poetry.
Due to the lack of poetic device, the reader could get bored, really fast and easily. Especially in a long prose poem such as this. I suggest stripping this poem down to it's strongest emotions, and remove anything that isn't needed. That way the poem isn't so weak and you can compel the reader.
That's all I have to say about this poem. I hope my review helps you out, and have a great day! ^-^