@ Chocoholic, thank you! Alej is the Alejandro mentioned in the beginning, would it make more sense if I kept his name as Alejandro throughout?
@ Clograbby, I really appreciate the feedback, it's good to have someone look at it who doesn't know everything that took place out of the story, you know? Also, I am flattered by the Allende thing.
A reallyreally late thank you to you both for the critiques! (Is this considered resurrection if the lateness is due to me being on holiday?)
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