Young Writers Society

Hey there, Alex here to review this article.
Now, I'm going to assume that this piece is made to try and persuade people to join and is not shameless advertising. Nevertheless, it is my duty to review in order to clear out the green room.
The first sentence of this piece was great for drawing the reader into the article by asking them a rhetorical question, however you did miss out on the question mark at the end of the sentence which somewhat reduces the effectiveness of this. It also seems to have combined two sentences into one: by ending with "well you can" without a pause it makes it hard to read. Try changing it from

Have you ever wanted to make music for fun and show to others well you can.

To this

Have you ever wanted to make music for fun and to show to others? Well you can.

The rest of the first paragraph does a good job in describing what the website is however as the reader I don't feel very encouraged to join still by the way you describe it. You are more listing features of it instead of "selling" them to the reader. As a musician myself, I would appreciate more adventurous vocabulary.
The second paragraph intrigues me: despite having very few grammatical problems, it confuses me what the purpose of this article is. In the first you made it out that you were trying to persuade people to visit but in the second you seem to be downplaying it a bit. Frankly, I would suggest replacing this paragraph with something else or wording it differently. An entire paragraph of negative points isn't helpful to your cause.
The final paragraph is good because you've used interesting phrases to hook the reader in such as how it is "blowing up with people" and how you imply there is a friendly community by recommending a user to the reader (make sure to get permission though). You also mention it is a free service which is very attractive to the reader and is a good finishing point. I am, however, as the reader, skeptical that it is "everywhere" on social media when I have not heard of this service before.
Overall, good skeleton but needs work.
-Sushi