Published February 11, 2010
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Um... Keep trying good luck
personally this bored me... i am really confused by the first verse.
and none of it made sence. it had no emotion and no passion. im not being mean and tying not to be harsh sorry if i am. but instead of me pointing out the good im goin to point out the bad sorry. but i think this song could use some improvement. my advice is to plan ur song have a peice of paper and write what the story of the song is then plan what happenes just like in school and you have to plan it. 2. start with the chorus then start with the verses and then a tune. this shoud help
best wishes xoxo keep trying dont give up