Published June 5, 2008
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Interesting. I got some random thoughts flittering in my mind in the middle of that. It's intriguing to me, thought I can't say particularly why. However, I did enjoy this very much. Good job!
I definitely like the end two stanzas, they sealed it for me after i was unsure at the beginning. can I ask, is the last line a quote? or did you just make it up for the piece?
Actually the idea behind this is fantastic, the way science can never express what a human body is, what it can do, and I love the way you use formatting. the "motion" part.
Lovely imagery, but i can't shake the feeling i get that this is from a Dada play...very surreal *spaces out*
Nice work, very thought provoking.