Published June 28, 2010
Living in a state of freedom
No restrictions or bars to hold me back
A feeling of incomparable power
Like an explosion leaving nothing intact
Living in a state of creativity
Realizing the countless tools I possess
To create scenarios all on my own
Every vision I have…limitless
Living in a state of possibilities
Every imaginable color is attainable
From aquamarine to carnation pink
My thoughts stained colorful
Living in a state of fantasy
Reality is just some concept
A world full of notions and ideas
Fulfilled dreams that are simply kept
Living in a state of reverie
These thoughts that keep me awake
To dream leaves no room to focus
I’ve succumb to its’ spell and it’s too late
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Hey Tigger! And yes, that is my nickname for you.
One thing I would really like is to see some sort of conclusion here. I mean, you have all these ideas here but then we are left to wonder at the very end, "Why did she say this again?" So you need to connect these ideas together! That way, it'll make your poem that much more powerful.
Best of luck!
Hey. I think that this poem is great. First off, I have to say that the idea of 'I am a dreamer' or 'I am in a dream world' is done a lot. But I think you made it your own, which is a lot better than just re-writing the same idea.
The other thing I noticed is that you had a really good rhythm to the poem, so that it didn't feel choppy but smooth and flowing. This goes the same for your rhyming scheme. A lot of the time, rhyming seems very unnatural or forced. But this was not the case here. All in all, this was a really good poem.