Published August 17, 2012
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I agree with Shadow Princess. This was really good. It flows nicely and works well with having no defined rhyme scheme, which is really hard to do. The only thing I can say is that you don't have to capitalize every line. It's not necessary to do so. Try sticking to the rules of punctuation when keeping this in mind.
Other than that, great job! I can't wait to see some of your other works.
~ Rocky
Thank you for reading this and reviewing it! I will definitely take your suggestions and try to better my writing. And I can't wait to post them!
Wow...I really liked that. It captured my attention from the first line which is always good. I liked the way it flowed, also. It flowed perfectly.
Good job!
Shadow Princess
This is really nice! Your writing style's got a charm of it's own.
Thank you for reading my work! I'm glad you all enjoyed it!
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