This poem is pretty good, I'd throw a simile in to work up the profound side of the poem.
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life, to me,
is but one hell of a movie,
quite hard in the making,
with casts and ques
and scenes to be curated,
but all the same...
it must come to an end,
with words of eulogy,
accompanying this, my series of unfortunate events.
if your life was a novel, what would be the tittle?
This poem is pretty good, I'd throw a simile in to work up the profound side of the poem.
Hello! Book_Dragon here for a really quick review.
I really like this poem. It's short and simple, but also deep. My favorite part is, "it must come to an end, with words of eulogy" because it's haunting. The critique I have is spelling. (Title only has one T). Other than that, everything is great!
Good job,
Book_Dragon
Hi thepages!! I'm Anne here to review your work!!
" We are the hero of our own story."
Mary McCarthy
I wondered whether this sentence could be better said, and then I read this poem. Fantastic job! I must say.
The structure of the poem was sweet and simple, the uncapitalized words(which seem deliberate) provide it a very neat and stylish look.
The title, however,was a little confusing at first. I do wish there was more said on that. It was only given a line in its own poem. How sad. You could have elaborated a little, that movies can be what we make them. Gloomy or joyous. Or what other cast members make them. Fortunate or unfortunate. And that too- how? What happened with the main character that he calls it a series of unfortunate events.
The meaning hit straight at the heart. Well expressed, well written
but all the same...
it must come to an end,
with words of eulogy,
Great rhymes! A good poem overall. It says what we all think from time to time. I've never really thought about what the title of my life would be, you've really got me thinking. I don't really like bad language, it typically takes away from the picture as a whole. However, I think this instance was used in a way that added to the poem.
Hopefully, your series of unfortunate events come to a close. I will have to think about 'the title of my life' for a while. Poetry is meant to make people think, at least good poetry is. I want to say more good things about this poem, but I'm running out of words to use. I guess there is one more thing and it's that there is nothing wrong with this poem! Seriously though I found no errors, so keep it up!
I enjoyed the poem and look forward to seeing more from you. Until then, happy writing!
I loved the poem I like reading poems that have a different scheme/rhythm and this one definently did. I think maybe the punctuation might be a little off. By using so many commas it kind of messes with the flow a little bit. There's is some really good vocabulary in here like the ones that relate to movies, (casts/ques/eulogy) which help support the simile of life being like a movie. The last sentence did kinda interrupt the poem cause it shifted the idea from movies to novels. I think it might sound a little bit better and help with the title being a series of unfortunate events if you revealed that would be the title of your movie in the last sentence, then asked the question for the readers so something like this.
"Life to me,
is but one hell of a movie,
quite hard in the making
with casts and ques
and scenes still left to be curated,
but all the same,
it must come to an end
with words of eulogy.
accompanying this
is my movie of life,
what i would call my series of unfortunate events.
Now its time for you to choose,
If your life was a movie filled with scenes and events,
What would you choose to title it?"
The title hooks the reader from the beginning. I spent a long time interpreting your poem and here u go with my interpretation.
Yes, life indeed is hard, hardest of all the things. Harder than enduring the Sun's rays from a small distance. I have heard of this lines: life is a book, life is a movie, etc. but never thought of fedding them into a poem, the great thought which u have thought.
“Making life is quite hard”
Making life is really hard... Once turned in the opposite direction, quite laborious to turn to the right way. The scenes of life is the scenes of reality seldom shown in movies, indeed they are hard to make.
The line ‘it must come to an end’ hit me hard. Every life comes to an end making ppl cry as ppl cry when characters die in a movie.
where u name your life as ‘a series of unfortunate events’, it portrays how miserable you feel about life. Hope everything's right. And I love the ending. My answer: I am yet to think what life is. But, surely a complex thing.
You really did an amazing job portraying your emotions and feelings in the poem. It's a short poem, yet it portrays an eternal image.
Keep writing!!!
This was a fun, compelling read!
life, to me, is but one hell of a movie,
quite hard in the making,
with casts and ques
and scenes to be curated,
but all the same...
it must come to an end,
with words of eulogy,
accompanying this, my series of unfortunate events.
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