Published November 30, 2005
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I didn't mean death by glass in a literal sense. It could be taken to mean anything - like crashing into an image of yourself - not just as it is written
I don't particularly love this poem to be honest, though!
Is it possible to be killed by glass?
I think this would flow better if you took out 'Ignore the scarlet of my head'.
As a mere shadow I watch myself die is my favorite line.
Maybe a comma before sigh, or just swap another word for it (unless the people are the ones sighing)
Not bad; and I like it. Personally I'd call it-Smack, Crack, Black