The room was filled to the ceiling
When there wasn't a person there
There was a stereo
It seemed uncanny
The magic that happened
We had never met, nor spoke
Nor even seen one another
But that all changed
That one fateful time
When your eyes met mine
Dancing together, we slowed
To a more graceful flow
One moment we were there
And the next
We were in the air
Floating
Floating
I then asked myself
Where did those fireworks come from?
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Thank you all for your reviews! This is actually based on an experience that I had about a year ago.
Great poem!
I agree with Stargirl101 on her review, but I'll add a few points of my own. The first stanza, I must admit, is a little confusing. The last one though, is definitely my favourite.
It's so romantic and mysterious at the same time. Well done!
I love this stanza (Is it a stanza? I'm not sure), as it just brings the mood of the poem together.
This is almost as if the meeting of the two people mentioned was totally unexpected (as it was), and the narrator of this poem is dazed by their beautiful encounter.
I adore this! Keep up the good work!
Hi there,taliarose.
What are you trying to say to the audiences from your poem?Sorry,because I dont understand about what you want to say through your poem.Maybe because I didt have a sense of poetry,thats why I not able to get the message there.But I just want to tell you here,the poem who not able to convey the message to the audience is not a successful poem.However,I can see that you have a tallent to become a writer.Just need to read more example of poem by other writer.
Good Job from You.Please pardon me if this comment hurt your feeling.