Every day I feel the eyes on my back. I feel it watching me from that horrid place. Every step I take in that place its eyes pierce me like ice from the shadows.I've only ever heard its footsteps. I don’t know what it looks like nor do I want to, but sometimes it feels like when I close the door...Its eyes open.
Oh my!!!! YOU MUST WRITE MORE IMMEDIATELY!!! I'm serious, I cannot wait for more!! It grabbed me right at the beginning, and held me there for the rest of the teaser. I did not like it.
I loved it!!!! Please write more -- seriously 
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And tell me when you do!! Because I will read it, and review it immediately!!
Ooo! 
Great description. Even though this is very short, I think this has amazing potential. You just need to work on placing commas and capitalizing after a period. Like right here;
ive only ever heard its footsteps. (ive should be I've)
The last line was perfect, I seriously felt a tingle go down my spine. Those words were just so perfect, and the three periods before it I think really made it even more suspenseful. The title is awesome and it fits the story you're trying to create beautifully. You should definitely turn this into a novel, I would really enjoy reading it.
And welcome to YWS! If you have any questions about the site, I'd be happy to answer them for you.
~BookWolf
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