Every day I feel the eyes on my back. I feel it watching me from that horrid place. Every step I take in that place its eyes pierce me like ice from the shadows.I've only ever heard its footsteps. I don’t know what it looks like nor do I want to, but sometimes it feels like when I close the door...Its eyes open.
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Oh my!!!! YOU MUST WRITE MORE IMMEDIATELY!!! I'm serious, I cannot wait for more!! It grabbed me right at the beginning, and held me there for the rest of the teaser. I did not like it.
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I loved it!!!! Please write more -- seriously
And tell me when you do!! Because I will read it, and review it immediately!!
I'm glad you like it, but don't expect anything from this for a while. I currently have a small short story sitting in drafts so I need to go do some reviews.
also I'm terrible at writing reviews so it will be a while
Ooo!
Great description. Even though this is very short, I think this has amazing potential. You just need to work on placing commas and capitalizing after a period. Like right here;
Those words were just so perfect, and the three periods before it I think really made it even more suspenseful. The title is awesome and it fits the story you're trying to create beautifully. You should definitely turn this into a novel, I would really enjoy reading it. 
If you have any questions about the site, I'd be happy to answer them for you.
ive only ever heard its footsteps. (ive should be I've)
The last line was perfect, I seriously felt a tingle go down my spine.
And welcome to YWS!
~BookWolf