Hey sudamasri, here for a Review Day review,
Positives:You've got very consistent, standard flow that's easy and fun to read because you can picture yourself singing it to a well known tune, so that's good.
A lonely mind is a devil's workshop,
I thought this was particularly cool, as it feels like a personally adapted version of the common saying, "an idle mind is the devil's playground." It's the same, yet subtly different, just enough that I can look at it from a different angle and gain something more from it.
Negatives:
A play which has multitudinous characters,
Your use of "multitudinous" here just feels like you were trying to use a big word in the sentence. I don't see how or where it was truly needed, and you haven't applied it to anything else. If you used it as the rhyme for this stanza, it might work, but other than that it just sticks out like a sore thumb.
But believe me, it's strength was so might,
Not sure what you mean here? It's a bit confusing because the grammar is incorrect.
I give it:
Points: 6987
Reviews: 117
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