Don’t trust
You’ll only end up getting hurt
Don’t love
You’ll regret it
Don’t regret
They won’t
Don’t care
They don’t
Never forgive
They don’t want your sorry
Don’t cry
What does that accomplish?
Don’t believe
You’ll just be let down
Don’t dream
People will only crush them
Don’t get close
They’ll push you away
Don’t let them in
They won’t understand
Don’t feel
Why feel when it hurts so much?
Don’t look back
Just leave it all behind
Don’t stay
Follow their example and just walk away
Don’t change for them
They’ll still see you the same
Don’t feel for them
You’ll be the one who ends up with all the pain
Don’t look out for them
They won’t for you
…
Are people kind or cruel?
Neither
People are
SELFISH
They don’t need you
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Er... I don't know about this. It doesn't seem to poetic to me, and it left no impact. It's like one of those "Do's and Don'ts of Life" kind of things, which isn't exactly considered "poetry". You're telling your readers what they shouldn't do, and it bores us because it sounds like you're a parent telling a child not to cross a street without looking or a teacher instructing students not to do drugs.
It's seems kind of listy, as Amelia said, and I didn't pick up on your emotions. Keep trying.
Best wishes with your work!
~*Syd*~
Its really kinda no offense, you said it yourself, emo. i don't mind it being emo. It is a strange form of poetry but its good
thats really simple
lulu
This doesn't seem like poetry; more like a survey, almost. It's very list-like; I can see where it's going from the first line. The greatest thing about poetry is that you can say what you want while saying something completely different. Nothing of that nature happens here.
Keep the same idea, that people are selfish, but think more in images and actual words rather than punchlines and morals and it, like all ideas, can be beautiful. If you'd like some recommendations for poetry to read and learn from, I'm sure we could ask around and find something lovely.
Good luck!
-Amelia