Breath.

This is really good, for starters. I just want to say that it has no punctuation and that is an issue. You don't want to have one big paragraph. Break it up using commas, periods, semi colons, and things of that nature. That would definitely improve this poem. Other that that, it looks wonderful!

Wow! You've painted an eerie scene that caught my attention right from the start!
My only comment is you spelled silence wrong. e not a.
Great work! Keep it up!

Thanks guys! (:

I agree with Yanni1995. Just fix the one spelling mistake and punctuation and this poem will be fanstastico!! XD This was great. Good luck and Happy Writing!!!

Beautiful poem but you should put punctuations or else all the lines will just run into each other.

Running out of oxygen inside a hospital room,
The fear of what comes next lingers in the depths of your mind.
You start screaming,
but the only sound heard is muffled.
He's there,
In the room with you.
Wherever you turn,
Even when you close your eyes,
You know he's coming.
So, you cringe in hopes of avoiding pain.
He leans in close,
Whispers silance in your ear, - silence
Kisses your eyes shut,
And leaves you one last breath.