Young Writers Society

Hello, GG to reviewing your poem. : )
I truly loved this one. You brought forth exaggeration with the boldness which I thought was a wonderful idea. Your wording is very good as well and so far, I can find no basic errors (as far as punctuation or capitalization).
The only part I am wondering about is this sentence.

"Except that girl
(whoever she is)
is so boring,
and no one would like her."

I realize that several people feel that they are boring and not a single person would find them suitable enough for liking. Truly, that isn't correct because everyone is interesting in their own ways. Perhaps that is just bringing the view into the poem, and in that case, I can understand that.
I am not an excellent reviewer but I certainly hoped that helped! My favorite sentence was:
"Simplicity is easy for one to dismiss
but even easier for me to deal with."

Keep writing!
GG

Hi storyisking! Niteowl here to give this lovely piece a look-see for Team Dreamwave.

I really like this. It's worded so well and I think a lot of people can relate to the concepts. In fact, most of my comments are nitpicks because I don't have much else to say.

For if I wrote an analyses of my individual,

The ground fifty below would look
so finite, so comforting.

But I lost that script, misplaced
somewhere between "hello" and goodbye."

I really enjoyed this read. It was powerful and intense and beautiful. It left me feeling empty and awkward, which is kind of a cool sensation. The mentality presented in this poem was incredibly powerful, and I think it's what really crowned the piece.

"The ground fifty below would look
so finite, so comforting."

This chunk, in particular, was especially breathtaking. What a powerful statement-- it was astounding. The lucid, uneasy feelings that fluttered through me when reading that were unthinkable. I've never felt so awful and impressed in the same moment.

"But I lost that script, misplaced
somewhere between "hello" and goodbye.""

Another perfectly horrifying, folly chunk. It's beautiful and terrifying. I think it's my favorite part of the piece entirely.

Overall, this was beatifically dreadful. A wonderful mix of sensations to produce an intense, hard read.
One of the best I've read-- angst and all!
Keep writing!

This is fantastic and I applaud you for having the strength to bring it up out of your feeling and turn it into speaking and writing.

I love especially this line:

I was much happier never knowing
the implications that befell my spoken words.