I must congratulate you, I have loved this poem.
What surprised me the most was the feeling of discomfort, that perfectly accompanies the message of the poem, that is created as you read it. It really makes it more enjoyable, and is probably a difficult thing to achieve.
Nonetheless, I must mention that writing “it’s all over the news” wasn’t the best choice. The rest of the poem is written with a quite formal yet easy to read and understand language, but “all over the news” stands out, as it is rather informal.
I hope I have helped!
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