Published February 6, 2011
Loners,
Everyday in my way home, I see people who sets a lone crying, no friends, no lovers, no family, no one who cares for them, that really hurts me, I mean to see a person like that who feels so lonely in life.
Some of us might make fun of them and call them names that really hurts, those worlds will make their lives more miserable that it is right now, I believe that everyone of us most help one and make them feel like they have someone, that they have a reason to live, and make them feel like that they are not alone in this life.
Ronald Anthony said: “When we truly realize that we are all alone is when we need others the most”, that saying express what I have said about loners, that they are desperately need us.
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Thanks buddy =)
I truly love this picture. The writing like noted above, could use some deeper insights but i won't repeat that. Great art!
It's only the beginning so ya I need time, I should clarify that before.
sorry again
Hi, spy0h. I would give you my opinion of this, but I'm not sure what you want to do with this. Is this the beginnings of a short story, or just an artistic commentary? Also, I'm not sure, did you draw/paint that picture?
Otherwise, I like the vividness of this, so keep up the good work!
Thank you, I agree with you that I must right more deep, but I was on a hurry because of my driving lesson, so next time I promise you to do better.
Hey, good to read this. I really like the message it's passing especially as I can relate to it. But I feel you could have got under the skin of loneliness a bit more, not just write what everyone can see infront of them in lonely people but write what they don't see, get right ito things.
- this is ok, its just it doesn't grab you from the first moment.Try something more deep and dark. Because the topic of loneliness is really dark.- this is just stating the obvious. I feel you could write something far more interesting.
But I love your topic and the picture. keep writing, i think you have a talent that needs to come out. God bless you