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out of my league

by soundofmind


Author's Note: This is a song that I wrote. If you're able to listen before reviewing please do by clicking this link to a recording where I sing and play it.

everyone’s out of my league
I dont think that I will ever reach
all the standards set up for me
be it from my beliefs
or the ones projected on me

I'm aware that its all gonna blow
the moment that I don't show
but I can't keep up a pretty guise
cuz I know that they’ll see the inside
and they won't like it

and I know how it is gonna go
they’ll hate my guts but won’t tell me so
I hear it in their voice they’re gonna leave
out of my league

everyone has in their mind
an expectation of some kind
they should not be surprised
if I do not know what's right
according to what's in their sight

I'm aware that its all gonna blow
the moment that I don't show
but I can't keep up a pretty guise
cuz I know that they’ll see the inside
and they won't like it

and I know how it is gonna go
they’ll hate my guts but won’t tell me so
I hear it in their voice they’re gonna leave
out of my league


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Mon Nov 01, 2021 9:01 pm
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Wolfi says...



The range/harmonies on this song!!! Crazy good!




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Mon Nov 01, 2021 5:51 pm
CotardDelusionz wrote a review...



Nice poem, everything seems well constructed to me I don't have anything to critique. A easy to read poem that brings fear of judgement to light, and how one will put on a facade to hide away from judgement, because of the dislike they have for themselves. They don't even want to recognize the "bad" side of themselves so they especially fear showing it to someone else. This is also a poem a lot of people can relate to no matter your age. Everyone gets tangled with expectations and getting stuck and scared when they feel they can't reach them.




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Thanks for reading!



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Mon Nov 01, 2021 1:04 pm
AriesBookworm wrote a review...



everyone’s out of my league
I dont think that I will ever reach
all the standards set up for me
be it from my beliefs
or the ones projected on me


There will always be people better than you in life. All we can do is do our best through life.



I'm aware that its all gonna blow
the moment that I don't show
but I can't keep up a pretty guise
cuz I know that they’ll see the inside
and they won't like it


I've tried to bottle up my feelings. We've all tried that.


and I know how it is gonna go
they’ll hate my guts but won’t tell me so
I hear it in their voice they’re gonna leave
out of my league


and I know how it is gonna go
they’ll hate my guts but won’t tell me so
I hear it in their voice they’re gonna leave
out of my league


We've all been afraid of letting people down. I am afraid of it every day.


everyone has in their mind
an expectation of some kind
they should not be surprised
if I do not know what's right
according to what's in their sight


We spend too much of our lives worrying about other people's expectations.


I'm aware that its all gonna blow
the moment that I don't show
but I can't keep up a pretty guise
cuz I know that they’ll see the inside
and they won't like it


We can't keep our feelings bottled up forever. Sooner or later it's all gonna burst out of us.


and I know how it is gonna go
they’ll hate my guts but won’t tell me so
I hear it in their voice they’re gonna leave
out of my league


We shouldn't be afraid that people will leave us all because we aren't good enough.

Overall: Great song!




soundofmind says...


Thanks for the review, Aries!



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G'day, Soundofmind. Lyrics are definitely not my forte, and I haven't managed to sing any of mine as well you've done, but I will try my best sharing my impression with you.

I believe that the pitch and strength of voice you've chosen for these lyrics are superb, listening to it has a feel of somebody being quite close as they sing in your mind as you walk throughout the nature or have a moment of own space somewhere quiet, yet with some low-key noise at the background (wind/rain/people walking, ...). I reckon the guitar contributes to the soul feel well here as well.

Now, please pardon my attempt, as I'm more of a "poem" person, but I'd like to go through the stanzas and point out what felt a bit out of place or weak compared to the overall flow.

Right in the first stanza, it starts very pleasant with the power of first verse, the second behind it, unfortunately, feels forced to fit, especially with the follow-up flow of last three verses, which fit the first verse much better and set the overall setting of the song. You might have tried to fit it better into the song by dropping the chord a bit, but I'd imagine a deeper chord sounding more impressive at the "be it from my beliefs".

Second stanza is a fair pleasure to the ears, I wonder if it'd be easier to express without "but" in 3rd verse and "cuz" in 4th, as they feel sort of a filler.

Enjoyed heartily the third stanza, fourth was a good slow-down before bringing back the second and third stanzas again. Only thing I wonder is if the emphasis wouldn't be better in the "they'll hate my guts but won't tell me so" by switching "but" with "and" and use that "and" to underline the emotion behind the second half.

Thank you for your artistic contribution, it was quite a joy to listen to an actual recording done that way :)

Best regards,
Jeremy




soundofmind says...


Thanks again for another review! I appreciate your thoughtful feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed listening!

I also wanted to ask for clarity - so, the second stanza you referred to is the pre-chorus. The song is formatted like this: Verse 1, Pre-Chorus, Chorus, Verse 2, Pre-chorus, chorus. So, I'm talking about this bit:
I'm aware that its all gonna blow
the moment that I don't show
but I can't keep up a pretty guise
cuz I know that they%u2019ll see the inside
and they won't like it

And the chorus is the "and I know how it is gonna go" part.

You said that the pre-chorus feels forced to fit, and I was hoping if you have time if you'd be willing to explain what makes it feel like that to you in more detail!





Will definitely try to properly use the music terms next time :). Just for your heads up, when compared to your terms, then it is Stanza = Verse, Verse = Row in the stanza. If you read the review again with that in mind, I hope it'd clear things up. Now, as to the forced bit =). I will take the review part and put in the right terms and explanation.

Verse 1 starts very pleasant with the power of first row, the second row, unfortunately, feels forced to fit. This forced to fit is even more emphasized of the flow (how you sing) the remaining three rows, as it connects to the very first row instead of the second (there is a break in continuity). If I were to look for a possible cause, I think it'd be the drop down in chords and your voice at a wrong time/place. When I imagined singing it, I came to a conclusion that the drop down and voice switch would fit much better at "be it from my beliefs", as it'd emphasize this important message, and give extra attention to the last row "or the ones projected on me".

Another nitpick there is that the second row is the choice of words, it's starkly more difficult to sing than the first or third row, and you might have tried to fit it in better by the switch-up. Now, I'm not saying the row is bad, I like it, it's there with a good purpose, I just wonder if switching "will" with "could" would sound better for you, because "could" has a different charge in it when sung and I think it fits in better.




To be a master of metaphor is the greatest thing by far. It is the one thing that cannot be learnt from others, and it is also a sign of genius.
— Aristotle, Poetics