whoops, sorry about the double post!
Author's Note: Before reviewing, I ask that you please take a moment to listen to the recording of this song while you read for the full experience. Click this link to do so. Thank you! :)
I will never forget
The moment that you left
You told me that you would be back soon
Then you rode away
I knew that it didn't feel right
As I saw you run into the night
I told you I loved you
And I never saw you again
In my dreams I see you
Brother, when?
Will I wake up weeping
all over again?
Do you know the hole that
You left behind?
I wish you’d stop coming back
In my mind
Is the version that lives in my head
The only one that’s not dead?
There are no real answers
All this time I’ve talked to a ghost
I still can’t let you go
All this time, are you still alone?
I just want my brother
You’re someone I cannot replace
In my dreams I see you
Brother, when?
Will I wake up weeping
all over again?
Do you know the hole that
You left behind?
I wish you’d stop coming back
In my mind
And I cry
When I wake up
In the morning
After ten years I find
I’m still mourning
You
I really enjoyed both the lyrics - for their deep expression of longing for a loved one (and the pain that comes with it) and in how articulated and honest it comes across. The pain of the story feels lived in, I can see these characters and that feeling of love, pain, and regret while reading it, but the song is where these emotions are really showcased in a way that words can't do full justice. I loved the melody and the accompaniment that you composed for this, you have the mark of a great songwriter sound 
Wow, your voice is really calming. When you're in a bad mood and when you miss someone, it will be such a great thing to listen to this. The harmonizes are *chef's kiss*. And thank you for making me cry with the words and the melodies you sang. I hope you're okay and condolences to you. I feel like this will sound good on an early morning or when the sun is setting and your driving around the mountains. Thank you for sharing your song!
thank you for sharing this, its such an intimate moment. i listened to the soundcloud version and aghhh, it hit hard. your voice has such a calming, warm tone. it made me feel like i was being sung to sleep as a child! the lyrics are desperate and longing, something that most readers and listeners can relate to deeply. such a beautiful thing, and i'm sorry for your loss :c
you are doing great things!!
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