Young Writers Society

Greetings Singer!

Beyond my beloved horizon, I'm setting sail into uncharted pages with an itch for adventure. Through binoculars, I spy with my little eye a melancholic and yet beautiful song “brother, when?” that deserves a good review. Therefore without further ado, let’s begin.



Very first of all, a round of applause for you. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed listening to your song, it is so tragically beautiful. Your voice sounds angelic and perfect for a song such as yours, a song with a perfect voice and fitting lyrics.

The lyrics tells a tale written from the speakers perspective, a tale about the dear brother of the speaker who is gone, who rode away. And the speaker shares her grief, her hopes that she once had and the harsh reality. You've so skillfully portrayed an entire story in just a single song with a lyrics with deep meaning.

The chorus of your song will be my favourite part, not only the the sentences rhyme but the speaker seems to, figuratively, speak with her brother, as if he's here but still so far away.
You have a wonderful voice, I could really hear the 'grief' in your singing.

Everything in all and all in everything, your voice reminds me of another singer who sings songs just like yours, Sasha Sloan. Check out some of her songs for some extra inspiration or ideas, or just to add something else to your everyday playlist. I would recommend you Dancing With Your Ghost and Older.

That's it, that's all.
Hoping the review has been of value to you!

With writer's love,
Rose

Salutations, Sound of mind!

Title: Sound of mind

Lyrics/Poem:

My favourite thing about summer
I was out of league
when I crashed into you
I opened my heart

I just want to be with you
For paradise
You were my deep sea darling

But as time catches up to you
Now Look what you’ve done
I’m sorry I loved you
I tried

What do you want
In the dead of winter
Like a bitter pill
I just need a vacation

This is the end of the song
we’re in the same boat
Take me to the water
Tell me, do you want to fight for this too?

whoops, sorry about the double post!

I really enjoyed both the lyrics - for their deep expression of longing for a loved one (and the pain that comes with it) and in how articulated and honest it comes across. The pain of the story feels lived in, I can see these characters and that feeling of love, pain, and regret while reading it, but the song is where these emotions are really showcased in a way that words can't do full justice. I loved the melody and the accompaniment that you composed for this, you have the mark of a great songwriter sound

Wow, your voice is really calming. When you're in a bad mood and when you miss someone, it will be such a great thing to listen to this. The harmonizes are *chef's kiss*. And thank you for making me cry with the words and the melodies you sang. I hope you're okay and condolences to you. I feel like this will sound good on an early morning or when the sun is setting and your driving around the mountains. Thank you for sharing your song!

thank you for sharing this, its such an intimate moment. i listened to the soundcloud version and aghhh, it hit hard. your voice has such a calming, warm tone. it made me feel like i was being sung to sleep as a child! the lyrics are desperate and longing, something that most readers and listeners can relate to deeply. such a beautiful thing, and i'm sorry for your loss :c

you are doing great things!!