Young Writers Society

Hello, QueenMadrose here for a review!!



So I hope you are doing well today/night.



So, first and foremost, I'd want to compliment you on your outstanding work. It was a pleasure to read. All of these emotions were flowing out, and I loved it!

"I learned to read between the lines
of the emotions that you hide
you said what you meant
and I thought that you might
be scared of it"

I loved the line

"I learned to read between the lines"

It was simply so tempting to read the remainder of the song afterward. Your voice is beautiful. These sentences hit home for me. They're so well written that I can see the thought and time you've put into them. I enjoy reading your lyrics and listening to your music. You always make me feel something when you sing, no matter what. Keep up the great work!!!!


(I apologize; this was in my drafts for a very long time. When I used to go by Brokenheartsari.)

I learned to read between the lines
of the emotions that you hide
you said what you meant
and I thought that you might
be scared of it


It sounds like someone is finally speaking their mind for the first one while or possibly even their entire lives.


I learned to take a bit of truth
spin it around into a fraction of you
I tried to understand - what could I do
when you said lies, for who?


It seems like this certain person is pretending to be someone they're not to fit in or make someone happy.


and I wish
and I wish
could you take a bitter pill
and swallow it down for me
is it so hard to say
what you really think of me
they say the truth hurts
but I think it hurts more to hear
what you think I want to hear


The reality of life is often a hard pill to swallow. And it seems like the main character wants a certain person to swallow that pill of reality.


I learned to live between the lies
secrets and masks that kept us blind
we always thought that we knew
what was wrong with us but
we found in time
‘normal’ doesn’t mean right


The main character seemed to play along for a little while, but eventually wanted the person to stop lying to themselves, to stop trying to fit in with everyone else.



I’ve learned to uncode my broken ways
they always say the better ones realized that they strayed
and I want to mend things and be brave
but it must go both ways
would you meet me halfway?


The main character is again trying to convince the person to join them on a journey of true happiness instead of society's expectations.


and I wish
and I wish
could you take a bitter pill
and swallow it down for me
is it so hard to say
what you really think of me
they say the truth hurts
but I think it hurts more to hear
what you think I want to hear


One more time, the main character is begging this person to swallow the pill and become healthy alongside with them.


so I’ve learned to take it as it is
cause I cannot force you to
want more out of this
so I love you where you’re at
even though it pains me to know
you don’t want that
kind of love


In the end, the main character is on their own. They realize that they cannot force them to take the reality of life and finally stops wasting their time. They hope that one day, the person will accept the pill and walk with them.

Lovely song, as always sound! <3

OMG. I read the song, and listened to it on SOUND-CLOUD and I am IN LOVE!!! love it!

hey @soundofmind jay here to give you a quick review on what i have read in your poem!!!

First off soundofmind at soon i read this poem i im like he can sing so i came here and read this good neat poem and i have some lines that i really like in the poem and I wish
and I wish
could you take a bitter pill
and swallow it down for me
is it so hard to say
what you really think of me
they say the truth hurts
but I think it hurts more to hear
what you think I want to hear like you really did your best and i know you took your time and did what you had to do in this poem and you put the effort in this poem its like a vibe and thats what had in my mind was a vibe to your poem.


Second my compliment to your poem is you made some of the people on this site to sing better and to me you give some the site people some tips on how to sing


3rd how you can improve is that just keep writing poems and singing and recording them cause when i first got on here and when i saw you on the people updates i was like he can sing


4th and what i didn't like was when the poem had no other details in it like something else should goes to that poem like one more thing should of been in the poem to me and i know this is your poem and you do what you want to put in that poem in my own opinion



but have a nice review @soundofmind keep up the good work and hopefully i see you soon with new poems and new songs i im glad i read a poem like yours!!! by jay

Hello, this is Kelisot here, doing a review (because he needs points to publish more stuff and to support writers too!) I've also listened to the music and DAMN, you really have a beautiful voice. And you created the song by yourself. HOLY- I have no words. Creating a song by yourself... it's a dream, but I'm too young to learn all the music stuff... and I don't have the "perfect" hearing for chords and pitches so oof.

So generally, first stanza here.

I learned to read between the lines
of the emotions that you hide
you said what you meant
and I thought that you might
be scared of it

Hi soundofmind, Broady here. I guess this is more of a comment than a review but jeez that's some really cool stuff you have there! Keep it up! (I apologise, I'm not musically inclined or anything so I'm not really familiar with music stuff but it's really good in my opinion )