I love this chapter! I enjoyed reading all of it and I can't wait to read the rest!
"There was something so haunting about the cadence of his breathing as he laid in his bed before us. Watching the chest of a shriveled-up man, rise up and down with each breath made the whole concept of living seem so clinical. Somehow the idea of “being alive” was now boiled down to a breathing tank and the likelihood of his heart not surviving the night. We held our breaths as he struggled to take his. We knew that it was only a matter of time before his body surrendered and he would finally be at peace. He got weaker and weaker with each cough, choking on an infection that had taken control of his lungs."
In this paragraph it describes someone dying, it creates suspense and a sort of mystery as to who this guy is.
"For a man who had lived a life so full of love and joy, it felt wrong to be relying on some medical prediction of how much time he had left. I couldn’t shake the feeling that we were somehow giving up on him. Even when he told us he didn’t want to go back to the hospital, a part of me was convinced that he thought that’s what we wanted to hear."
This paragraph tells us that the guy who was dying had lived a life to its fullest and it had felt off to use a prediction on how much time he has left, that is often how most people feel, whether to family or friends.
"With each syringe of morphine, it felt like we were giving his body permission to finally stop fighting. I wish I knew that this medicine would basically put him in a coma for his last day on earth; had I known, I would’ve done everything differently."
This paragraph indicates that there may be a little flashback coming up soon, and how the mc regrets the decisions they made.
The rest of the paragraphs tell us how the mc gave him the morphine and how they felt like his last moments had been stolen from them. They describe how they had to watch him die from beginning to end.
Honestly, I really liked this chapter, from beginning to end, and I really can't wait to read more of it, so I hope that you post another chapter soon!
Have a good day/night, and stay safe!
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