Young Writers Society

Greetings! Katie here for a review!

This story was really tragic and touching. I know what it’s like to lose someone you love. I really liked the way you wrote it.
OK, nitpicks!

perfectly imperfect

perfectly imperfect

her perents present

her parents present

complements

compliments

aunts

aunt’s

socked

shocked

a “Of course!”

an “Of course!”

That was a tragic story and I am sorry for your loss. I have lost someone dear to me recently to. I still miss said person, and I honestly feel for you. The way you composed this story was beautiful.
Remember, life can be cruel but hang on it is worth it in the end.
People love you.

Thanks for sharing this very touching story. Wish I could have expressed myself so clearly at your age. Sorry about your loss of a loved one. life is cruel that way sometimes. You told us the story very well. That kept me reading until the very end. Very touching how she giggles over the imperfect yet perfect snowman and found humor in the midst of despair. The following are just in case you want to polish the composition.

Suggestions

parents
Christmas
sixty relatives
she paid
lie down
shocked
....future had [other] plans....
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At her aunts 50th birthday party[,]
She had accepted with [an] "Of course!"[w]ithout....
This news depressed her[,] but....
Sadly[,] this is a true story....
This news depressed her[,]but....
Sadly[,] this is....
It's been a while since her death[,] but....
[fifty] complements....
At her aunt[']s....


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