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Greetings! Katie here for a review!
This story was really tragic and touching. I know what it’s like to lose someone you love. I really liked the way you wrote it.
OK, nitpicks!
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That’s it for nitpicks really!
Apart from the grammar mistakes, I loved this story! It was amazing! It has the feel of an LM Montgomery (the woman who wrote Annne of Green Gables) work.
Best wishes and keep up the good work!
Katie xxx
It doesn%u2019t seem to show up on the quotes but there are two spaces between %u2018perfectly%u2019 and %u2018imperfect%u2019.
It doesn%u2019t seem to show up on the quotes but there are two spaces between %u2018perfectly%u2019 and %u2018imperfect%u2019 when there should be one.
I don%u2019t know what all of that %u2018 was about!
It did it again! It%u2019s supposed to be an apostrophe.
Thank you for the review
I wrote this at midnight (very tired) so there are a LOT of mistakes I should probably fix. Thanks again
That was a tragic story and I am sorry for your loss. I have lost someone dear to me recently to. I still miss said person, and I honestly feel for you. The way you composed this story was beautiful.
Remember, life can be cruel but hang on it is worth it in the end.
People love you.
Thank you, that means a lot. And I'm very sorry for the person you have so recently lost.
Thank you
Thanks for sharing this very touching story. Wish I could have expressed myself so clearly at your age. Sorry about your loss of a loved one. life is cruel that way sometimes. You told us the story very well. That kept me reading until the very end. Very touching how she giggles over the imperfect yet perfect snowman and found humor in the midst of despair. The following are just in case you want to polish the composition.
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Oh thank you. I wrote this midnight last night so now I see like a million mistakes that I didn't see before through my tired eyes.