Hello!
VioletFantasy here to give you a quick review. This poem is stunning! I love your rhyme scheme. It adds just enough rhyming without being overpowering. Also, your short lines and stanzas were very refreshing! A lot of poems are long and can be tiring to read. Your poem kept my attention the whole time.
Abundant potential
Beautiful regrets
Lingering doubts
She can’t seem to forget
This is definitely my favorite stanza, probably because of your strong word choice. Words like “abundant” and “lingering” can add so much to a poem! It’s a great way to start it off.
Heavenly invites
She boldly refused
The choices we make
We can not choose
I also wanted to mention this stanza because it is so true. Life acts in unexpected ways, and we end up choosing things that aren’t good for us, but that we have to choose anyway. Your words explain this so well and makes it sound absolutely beautiful!
Something else that I noticed in your writing is that a couple of the rhyming lines don’t quite rhyme. For example, “refused” and “choose” almost rhyme, but it is a little awkward. If you used different words, it might flow better. Of course, feel free to disregard this criticism if you are satisfied with your poem the way it is.
Overall, this is a lovely little poem that I thoroughly enjoyed reading. Keep writing!
Points: 1305
Reviews: 53
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