Feelings, what are they?
They are the most loyal emotions
And you 'feel' them everyday
The most trusting of notions
You must listen to them,
For they speak the truth
If you don't, then they will
become your worst enemy
I don't understand why
Women have so many, really
Is it to distinguish them from men
Or is that how its meant to be?
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Whoa, the rhyming in this is spectacular!! The questions give it depth and I think the flow is really good. Some poems lack flow terribly (like my own...grr...) I enjoyed reading this and you did a nice job overall. The first line especially is really good. Well done and Keep writing!
Hi silentriot,
So I can feel feelings, huh?
Guess that about sums up the intellectual prowess of this piece. You've clearly attempted to grasp everything ad nothing here, stuffing this bird with inane statements like those in the first stanza, the usage of all five senses like a machine gun round in the second stanza, and gender roles - for some reason - in the third stanza.
This is much below childish in its scope and presentation. Try again.
Hope that helped,
Galerius
I enjoyed this poem, but it feels like this is only about twenty-five percent of the full story. I advise, continue the journey through your thoughts! It doesn't feel full in the current format, but it does open up several interesting thought-invoking conversational pieces. Keep it up.