Published September 11, 2011
On September 11, 2011, our grocery store burned down.
Smoke rolled across Main Street. An eruption of flames lit the dark morning sky.
But I wouldn’t know. I went back to sleep.
The tornado sirens clanged. Firemen battled soot, and the sanity telling them to get out.
Some were injured.
But I wouldn’t know. I went back to sleep.
People drifted downtown, dazed.
Feeling like the earthquakes and hurricanes had finally hit our little Iowa town.
But I wouldn’t know. I went back to sleep.
Scorching memories of a day ten years past rose up with the smoke.
My town watched silently, side by side, facing the fires together.
But I wouldn’t know.
I went back to sleep.
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I liked this good write, I can relate to the 'I went back to sleep' but you were little right? I remember I was only 9 when that happened. My 5th grade teacher had gotten super silent after recess, and then she told us but being a bunch of kids you don't really care or understand, now that I'm older I see the videos of the 'jumpers' and I feel like crying, I imagine how scared they must have felt, either jump or burn to death. It's sad and it's messed up.
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Haha, I know that you just felt like writing. So many things can inspire a young writer's mind from time to time. This poem's lines were a bit too long. Maybe you could have shortened it? But I like the story. I hope you get a new grocery store!!!
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GREAT JOB AND KEEP WRITING!
~Kat
I found this poem to be very inspiring.
The idea is great!
I think that was the part I enjoyed most.
Keep up the great work!