There's a lot of different kinds
Of hairs in the world.
Brown hair,
Blonde hair,
Red hair,
Dyed hair.
And strawberry blonde.
There's a lot of different kinds
Of hairs in the world.
Short hair,
Long hair,
Buzz cuts,
Pixie cuts.
And medium length.
I have hair too.
Almost everyone has hair.
Except bald people.
I feel bad for bald people.
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Loved it!, the short clipped sentences provide a childlike reading. Your almost excited to tell the reader you know all the different "hairs in the world".
The fact you intentionally use the word "hairs" instead of hair, even though grammatically incorrect all adds to the naivety of the piece.
I love the ending, humorous and unexpected.
Good job!
It's great to come across a funny poem once in a while, and this is funny.
Thanks
Hey, yo, shinobithief! Strangelove here and I have a review for you!
This was a funny poem, I have to admit. It did make me chuckle a fair amount at the end, and I liked it. It was subtle, yet was delivered bluntly. What helps this a lot is the somewhat awkward tonal shift. Why was it awkward? It started off with the generic "humor" sense. "Everyone has hair", that sort of thing. I do find that humor just bleh, because it babbles on a toned down thing.
A technique to make something funny is the final "blow", the punch line. You did it in a mannered way that was actually really funny.
I felt like I've seen somewhat of a similar delivery like this, but it did make me laugh. It felt like a delayed, random response I would do in normal life. This can be conceived as "offensive", due to how people who are naturally bald and or has cancer can find it offensive. But, not everybody has the same humor.
Overall, good job.
Strange gives you..
7.8/10
Good job,
Keep writing,
Stay groovy, my friend.
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I love your hair poem. xD
Thank you! It's really great to hear that you liked my poem!
Hey, rhia here to review!
This was cute, short, and easy to read. It was a nice and fun, light poem. It made me smile.
I thought that saying "hairs" was a little awkward, as we often say "hair" to refer to all hairs on our heads. I'm not sure saying hairs is grammatically correct (kind of like saying deers, or geeses) but I don't know for sure.
I like how the last line was spaced out. All of the lines placement were done quite nicely.
You could have given a bit more imagery in this, though, by being more creative when describing hair colors and lengths. You're really supposed to show and not tell with poetry, and you were mostly telling.
But otherwise, it was cute.
Thank you.
The story behind the title "Hairs" is that once my gym teacher came into class and told us he got a hairs cut. Then he continued to tell us we should say hairs instead of hair because we have more than just one hair on our head.
There you go.
Haha, well that makes it more cute then.