Just something I wrote as I remembered some really bad stuff that happened to me and how I got better afterwards. Please comment, I could use the constructive criticism.
Sometimes at night
In that strange delirious half-light
I hear voices
Weird ones, pretty ones, angry ones
They whisper to me
And as I listen I remember
Of that cold and dark December
When I reached my rock bottom
All my memories of love forgotten
In the darkness shines a light
One you can’t see with normal sight
And through drowning water reaches
A hand that helps and teaches
I can swim, I just can’t find it
In my heart to live
Yet I did
And I here I lie
With my face to the sky
Listening to my voices
They speak of long made choices
But the past has gone
Now the future has come
Also I'm not sure if I'm in love with the title 
... Any ideas?
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I really, really enjoyed this. From the first line I felt like I had been tugged into your poem, and it was me remembering my dark days.This was my favorite stanza:
"And as I listen I remember
of that cold and dark December."
So anyway, amazing job on this. I don't have anything negative to say, I thought it was all really great. As for titles, with such a great poem, you have a lot to work with. You could pick your favorite line in the poem and start you brainstorming from there. Just a thought. Well, amazing job and keep up the good work!
Hey, forsakin here!
Yea! Good job, by the way!
I loved this! I actually read it twice, just because I liked it!
The first line caught me, and I didn't stop reading, which is good!
I'm not the best reviewer, but if you need anything,
Just shoot me a PM, and I'll take a look at it! I'm more than happy to review anything.
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this was awesome, i loved it.
you really made it flow perfectly and the rhyming was great!
and i sometimes feel just how you described.
great poem, keep it up.